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beginning the story :3

Posted by Sanchez150894 - October 29th, 2009


So this is supposed to be part one, the epilogue of my planned story:

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"Hey Seth! Nice day, huh?"

It's a warm afternoon in the middle of summer, 305 Anno Stella.

"Yeah. Sun's shining, people are happy and everything's fine"

After the fourth World War only a few nations were able to rebuild. Wide areas of the world were either devastated or too hostile to live there. Stricom is a village in the middle of nowhere, once a fortified outpost of the forces of the evil Lord Jedas, who tried to achieve world domination, now a peaceful home for lots of innocent civilians and war heroes.

"Too bad that that damn war almost destroyed the whole planet..."
"Well, at least we still exist..."
"Meh... I guess you're right"

Seth Krorros and Chazz Orodo, two of the five "Legendary Peacebringers" who brought the 4WW to an end and destroyed the evil forces, now live in this little village. Since the war is over, they have pretty much nothing to do.
Seth, pretty tall, spiky blonde hair, blue eyes and almost always in silence, is known as a outstanding tactician and unbeatable with his custom Gunblade. He wears a black coat, which reaches down to the ground, black boots and camo pants.
Chazz can be considered as Seth's brother. They two have been together since they were small children. Chazz is a litle bit smaller than Seth but has more muscles, brown hair and eyes, always wears his sunglasses. He really enjoys to laugh and tell jokes. His dual Demon Slayer Pistols always at his side, he can pose a really tough challenge to every enemy. A swift trickster and only hardly hitable. Wearing a Hawaiian shirt, a casual jeans and red sneakers he looks like a normal civilian on holidays.

"Seth?"
"What?"
"May I ask you a question?"
"Go on"
"Have you ever had a girlfriend?"

Seth immediately blushes and looks up to the clear blue sky.

"HA! I knew it!"
Chazz shouts and begins to laugh out loud
"WHAT?"
"Ya' know, if you ever had a girlfriend you'd be a bit more cheerful!"
"Dude, come on..."
"I mean it! I'll help ya' to find one if you want!"
Chazz smiles and looks up to the sky, too.

They both looked up the sky, lying in the wide and green grasslands around Stricom. Cows are grazing nearby and birds were singing and flying around. Everything seemed perfect and peaceful.

"So what do ya' think buddy?"

Chazz looked at Seth, awating a response but he didn't even pay any attention to Chazz anymore. Sunken in memories of his former happier times before the war broke out Seth seemed to be fallen asleep.

"Oh boy... Hey! What do you think how the others are?"
"God damn it, can't you just be quiet for a while? Sigh... I don't really know but I guess they're alright. At least they're strong enough to look after themselves."
"He he, damn right you are! I really hope that we could meet again... It was awesome fighting along their sides!"
"So could you please b-"

A loud explosion right behind them interrupted their conversation...

"Oh my GOD! What the hell was that???"

Chazz stood up and looked at Stricom's Walls, which have been blasted to several huge rocks and debris and now standing in flames. The entire village seemed to be burning and thick, black smoke ascended from the once peaceful scenery. The once clear blue sky now darkened and was blood-red filled with the black clouds of smoke.

"God damn! I thought the War's over! Why and who's attacking NOW? We have to get moving and go take a look!"

Seth jumped up to his feet, looked shortly at Chazz and nodded at him. Chazz nodded back and they began to dash towards the village to check the situation...
The fire spread out very fast and have almost reached the grasslands. The animals paniced, ran around irritated and tried to flee from the all-destroying fire, which grew with every second.

"WHOEVER DID THIS WILL REGRET IT!!!", Chazz shouted

And the silhouettes of them two disappeared in the fires.

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What do ya' think? :3 It features the comic chara's I made a long time ago. "Seth Krorros" is that Gunblade guy on a high rock... maybe you should take a look at this page. the first three images there show the charas that will appear in the story, the third one shows Seth


Comments

Supah Awesome! =P

Really? thx! ^^

nice comrade sanchez,the red star will be proud of your work,no doubt sbout that!

thx! :3

Seems promising!
Might I request you refrain as MUCH as possible to follow any storyline that currently exists?
Cause this guy, zerogeass, made a story, and it's really nothing but a communism-based Code Geass Recolor. Srsly, read it in his previous posts.
Anyway, it is currently be following an original plotline. This is good.
Key things I don't want you to do:
a.) Code Geass it. Don't fuel the cliché fire of convoluted plans that lead to your Protagonist's death.
b.) Do NOT divulge into MSs. I swear, that almost always leads to a simple fork in the road at the end: Protagonist LIVES after saving the world or Protagonist DIES while saving the world. You CANNOT do those.
c.) A guy-only party. This will make *some* people (present company excluded) think your story is HARD GAY.
d.) The Busty, ditzy woman. Overused. Quite a lot.

Things I'd like to see:
a.) War nightmares. Heheh, the veterans have them, why not these guys.
b.) Some convoluted plots.
c.) Betrayals.
d.) Epic Battle Scene with 9000+ people. (not literally, but if the story allots for an army of that size, then GOGOGO.)
e.) Stylized movement in good detail.

I think I've bored you enough for one night.
:3

nah, I really want to make is as original as possible. Sure the characters may look a bit FF style, but the whole story won't contain any Code Geass, MSs, busty ditzy women or one-man armies. I'll promise :3
That war nightmares thingy sounds nice *adds it to notebook*. Betrayals and epic battle scenes have been planned already as well as the detailed movements (I want it to be well-imaginable ^^)
EDIT: I don't get it why so many guys like huge boobs... I mean aren't they somehow annyoing? Two big thingies dangling around in the way... at least I don't really like them

In my opinion, I just don't like the look of that on my characters. (it wouldn't make sense anyway; they're all 14-18). Then I fail to see its practicality. You can't do amazing non-weapon combat with those on yer chest.

another point of view for me :3 You're right about the combat part!

Chazz cums in Seth frequently.

AMIRITE?

O.o <[...]

uhm... I don't really like this idea... kinda scares me...

LIES.

ok, to make things clear: I AM N O T GAY! ok? NOT GAY! And NONE of MY CHARACTERS are gay! NONE!!! >:( (<=Angreh Faic)

^ What he's saying should be included in Code Geassing it.
Both of them must have female protagonists and not talk to each other in private.
They also MUST NOT HAVE BEEN CHILDHOOD FRIENDS. That leads to assumptions of gayness by people, as with CG.

oh... GOD DAMN IT! XD damn, so I'll have to edit that part later... meh
btw: thx for all these ideas! :3

Code Geass = Having girls surrender themselves to a guy (one pulls him into the shower) and him not fucking them or looking down at their titties/vagina and "respecting them" because that's what white knight faggot Jap-lovers do.

If LULU wasn't a complete fag and this actually happened how many times would he not be a virgin?

i dunno'... didn't even begin counting it :3

It'd be a hentai harem anime with giant robots and nukes.

HOLY SHIT! Hentai with giant robots and nukes??? XD now THAT's crazy!

Those nukes would have tentacle monsters in them. Also, robots would have tits and vaginas and anuses.

Also, my favorite betrayal story that is NOT from animu because I don't watch animu is:

"HOLY SHIT MAN WE GOTTA GO LIGHT THE BEACON SO THAT GUY CAN CHARGE AND HELP THE ARMY.

HOLY SHIT MAN WE LIT THE BEACON RIGHT ON TIME.

HOLY SHIT MAN THAT...Guy pulled back? FUCK EVERYONE IS DEAD.

Okay we're back in town...crap. Why are they saying we killed the King and are traitors?"

woah, nukes with tentacle monsters in them? wouldn't it be more logical if they'd cause the others mutate into tentacle monsters? XD nah, just kiddin'
ehm... your imagination of robots has already been realized by these Japanese hentai and mecha freaks...

sick but very funny betrayal XD I LOL'ed at the part when they noticed that guy's pulling back